Reader's Critique

 

What I appreciate about everyone’s writing from their poems and object stories is that each of them show what they are like as people. I feel that is one of the most important parts of being a writer, so I was happy to see this about their work. Sam shows herself as a fun-loving spirited person with a deep love for her family, McKenna a thoughtful individual, Amanda as quiet and dedicated, and Josh as kind of whimsical.  The “I Am” poems were more about the individual people themselves, while the object stories showed their writing styles. This critique gave me insight into the talented writing I’m going to be seeing in this class, and I can see that I have plenty to be excited for within this Creative Writing class.



To Sam:
Awesome job, this totally reminds me of family camping trips I've had over the years. I like the subtle incorporation of the Jenga pieces, and how they're not the total focus of the piece. I also love how you portray your relationship with your grandpa, it's very sweet. Thanks for sharing!

Hi Sam! Good job writing your experiences throughout your life, I especially like the parts in which you write about your relationships with your family, like watching football with your dad. You do a fantastic job showing the fun memories you have with your family, and I like how you illustrate what a fun person you are. Excellent work, I'll keep an eye out for your writing from now on.

To Amanda:
Hi Amanda, what's up? This is an excellent excerpt that reads as straight out of your life. It really just shows what you're about with the way you speak about it being your second favorite book and your "handle with care" books being kept safely in your room. Well written! It's like you wrote a painting of the experience and your personality shines through the words. I want to read your next story!

Hiya Amanda! Your poem really goes into your personality, and it shows what kind of person you are. I like the lines of "mother figure to a dog" and "volunteer, loyal and proven". Being in creative writing with you is awesome.

To McKenna:
Beautifully written. Truly. Your ponderings on what your grandmother might've prayed for are so realistic and written in earnest. I love how you explained your wish that the prayer rock could tell you your grandmother's prayers, as it is very relatable for any person who has ever wished to know more about someone important in their life. Your next work will be just as wonderful to read, I can't wait.

Hi McKenna! Your poem gives great insight into your personality with your tastes and background, it has been written beautifully. I feel like it lets a person get to know you very well through your interest in cats, travel, and generally enjoying life. I relate to you in that I have a very hard working family and a sibling six years apart from me. Fantastic job writing, I can't wait to see what you write next.

To Josh:
Hello Josh, I enjoyed the transition of your character throughout the story from one facet of his personality to another. The use of the 3-D printed gun in your work is a good reflection of the modern world as well. The safety moral within the story about being careful using equipment that can potentially hurt you is good as well.

Hi Josh, I really liked the humorous and honest end to your poem, and the interesting imagery to explain yourself. I too tend to get lost within my thoughts. It's good to meet you and I look forward to what other writing you will be doing this year.