Mixed with a punch-like radiant raspberry fizz
Melting the drinks on our tongue we pass amazing azaleas
My shoulder brushes an early clematis petal
So new, so fragile, but pink like our cheeks, like a pretty petunia
We dance along our pale odyssey, all the care of an orchid
We look at the light sky, clashing with of china aster
Lovely imagery of a dance through the garden. I like the line suggesting the steps are cautious and delicate with "all the care of an orchid."
ReplyDeleteYo, yo, Katie,
ReplyDeleteThis was great! You connected all the colors into this poem really seamlessly. I was impressed with how creative this one was. It can be hard to try to be creative with such a structured poem assignment, but you really made this your own and I loved it. I also enjoyed how you painted a picture with this work. Your imagery was really great! It’s a really gentle poem with a cute undertone. It’s innocent and lovely, and I completely love it! It can really be hard to find good writing, but I have really found it in your writing. I wanted to go to this place you’d created, it really seems like a good place to be. When I read your writing, I can’t really help but to feel happy. That’s another thing I love about this poem, it’s incredibly creative! Great job, awesome work!
Stay Awesome,
Taylor Denton